Lost in narration…
My meeting with Jan was extremely inspirational and insightful. We listened to both my prologue and narrative. Jan suggested that my prologue be less wordy and more image based. I think the term she used was “syncopation” or in other words, create fluid relationships with the archival images. She also suggested that because my narrative…is a narrative-it has a lot of descriptions etc. I should use hot and cold images to imply, instead of literally show.
Jan also brought up a very important point; by having the same person narrate both segments, I’m losing the reliability of my narrator. She suggested that I do the narration and change the story to first person and add a more contemporary voice to accompany the reminiscent voice. I really appreciate this advice as the first person narration would make the piece much shorter and allow for more experimental imagery. The thing is, I’m kind of attached to the John Robbins narration as it is hilarious and creates a “Hey Arnold” sort of feel..so I suppose I will try it both ways.
Last week was incredibly inspirational. I’m very grateful to have had the opportunity to meet and work with Jan, her feedback was very valuable and wonderful.
Filed by boljan08 at April 20th, 2009 under production
She used a lot of really amazing words.
Jaden — April 20, 2009 @ 8:13 pm